Tuesday, March 31, 2009

questions

1. What do the fact checkers at the New Republic do when they cannot find the information to verify?

2. How does Charles Lane feel about Glass once he discovers he is lying? he's mad at him

3. How does Glass gain the sympathy of his fellow journalists at the New Republic? he is friends with them, they love his articles even though they are false

4. How does Glass dodge the truth again once he realizes he has been caught by Forbes!

5. What excuse does Glass give Lane for lying? he says he was expanding the truth

6. What is the argument for not firing Glass from the New Republic? he's a good writer

Thursday, March 19, 2009

final op-ed

There have been so many debates about abortion, if it should be illegal or not; and the debate about if it is made illegal should the woman be arrested if she has an abortion? I personally think that abortion is very, very wrong. While I understand where people who support it are coming from I have quite a few arguments against their claims.

One argument people have is “women have the right to privacy.” While this is true, that we have a “right” to privacy that doesn’t mean you can do whatever you want. For example even if you are in the privacy of your home, abusing your child is still wrong, or selling illegal drugs in your home is wrong. You do not have the right to kill a living human being because you have the right to privacy.

One of the most popular arguments pro-choice people bring up is that a preborn baby is not a human being, that it is just a part of the women’s body. Well this is most defiantly not the case! Basic biology begs to differ with their argument. Biology says that an embryo/ fetus are indeed a human. If the baby is not a living human, why does a doctor who’s treating a pregnant woman have two patients? If the preborn are not human, why do 37 states and the federal government have laws charging two counts of murder when a pregnant woman and her baby are killed?

One other point that has been made is that abortion should be legal for those who are raped because it’s not their fault that they are pregnant. Yes, rape is a terrible thing but should a child pay the price for poor choices their father made? If the woman does not want a baby because of how he/she was conceived than there is the option of adoption.

Many people ask the question, “Well if the government made abortion illegal would the women who does have one be arrested?” A lot of people would answer no, because the woman has gone through enough pain. However my answer would be yes, she should. If we put murderers in jail than shouldn’t we treat abortion, the death of a preborn HUMAN, as a murder?

The child should not have to pay for the choices the parents or parent (in the case of rape) made. I believe that Abortion is entirely wrong.

Wednesday, March 18, 2009

peer edits

Nate Hesser

1. Is there a clear point of view? (position)yes there is

2. Does the Op-Ed state the problem and solution simply?yes

3. Does the piece address the counter arguments?there isn't really another side to it.
4. Is the Op-Ed interesting? yes it is

5. Are the paragraphs organized logically? yep

6. Does each paragraph develop an idea to support the thesis? yes they do



Julia Pagh

1. Is there a clear point of view? (position)Yes there is.

2. Does the Op-Ed state the problem and solution simply? yes it is.

3. Does the piece address the counter arguments? a little, more could be used.

4. Is the Op-Ed interesting? very!

5. Are the paragraphs organized logically? there is only one paragraph but it flows well.

6. Does each paragraph develop an idea to support the thesis? the points made do support the thesis.

Tuesday, March 17, 2009

opinion

There have been so many debates about abortion, if it should be illegal or not; and the debate about if it is made illegal should the woman be arrested if she has an abortion? I personally think that abortion is very, very wrong. While I understand where people who support it are coming from I have quite a few arguments against their claims.

One argument people have is “women have the right to privacy.” While this is true, that we have a “right” to privacy that doesn’t mean you can do whatever you want. For example even if you are in the privacy of your home, abusing your child is still wrong, or selling illegal drugs in your home is wrong. You do not have the right to kill a living human being because you have the right to privacy.

One of the most popular arguments pro-choice people bring up is that a preborn baby is not a human being, that it is just a part of the women’s body. Well this is most defiantly not the case! Basic biology begs to differ with their argument. Biology says that an embryo/ fetus is indeed a human. If the baby is not a living human, why does a doctor who’s treating a pregnant woman have two patients? If the preborn are not human, why do 37 states and the federal government have laws charging two counts of murder when a pregnant woman and her baby are killed?

Another point that is made is that abortion should be allowed when a woman is sexually assaulted. Yes, rape is a terrible thing but should a child pay the price for poor choices their father made? If the woman does not want a baby because of how he/she was conceived than there is the option of adoption.

Many people ask the question, “well if the government made abortion illegal would the women who does have one be arrested?” A lot of people would answer no, because the woman has gone through enough pain. However my answer would be yes, she should. If we put murderers in jail than shouldn’t we treat abortion, the death of a preborn HUMAN, as a murder?

The child should not have to pay for the choices the parents or parent (in the case of rape) made. I believe that abortion is entirely wrong.

Monday, March 16, 2009

finished feature story

One day I was sitting at my computer doing homework while looking up bands on the center of music now, Myspace. I had found this amazing band called Never Shout Never!. While listening to this rad band I looked through their music profile and found out the band was run by one guy who didn’t even have a record deal. I was so impressed but how many plays he had gotten on his music and wondered how he was getting that many hits without a record deal.
Myspace is really spreading the word about amazing bands. One of my favorite bands Children 18:3 was found on Myspace and signed to a record deal because of their circulation. Never Shout Never! has appeared on MTV and their music video is being played on MTV’s music countdowns. He said “If it weren’t for Myspace and my amazing fans I would not have made it this far.” The only reason he made it to the video countdown was because of the overwhelming amount of votes he got on the online contest. The people who voted for him were the fans who have found him on Myspace.
Christofer never expected to get this popular. During high school he recorded his own music on the side and put it up but he never thought people would really listen to it. He said he was kind of a loner in high school, which is very surprising when you meet him; he’s a very lovable and outgoing kid. Since he felt like he didn’t fit in he decided to quit school to pursue his music.
One day when I was sitting in my photography class telling my friends about Never Shout Never! A girl in my class, Sara Hurt, yelled that she loves them. I was extremely surprised; I didn’t think anyone would have heard of them. She heard of them through Myspace. She likes that not that many people know about them, she kind of likes obscure bands. That’s what I like most about Never Shout Never!.
I never listen to the popular bands; it makes the music seem more real when they aren’t in the public eye. Myspace helps a lot with that. I can easily find obscure bands through Myspace. If you like one band all you have to do it look at their friends where there are usually bands that have a similar sound to them. The recent growth of music is because of sites like Myspace that let simple garage bands get discovered.

opinion pre-writing

1. What is a problem/issue that our entire student body (our school, community, country, etc.) faces today? Abortion

2. What is your view/position on the problem or situation? Strongly against abortion

3. What would you like to achieve with your editorial? (What is the desired result?)
To persuade
4. How will you persuade your audience to adopt your viewpoint as theirs? List at least 4 persuasive points.
1.it's murder
2.there are emotional effects after the abortion
3.give the baby to someone who wants it (adoption) instead of killing a living person.
4.people think it's okay to kill a living person if it is still in the womb but killing a person who is no longer in the womb is a crime.


5. How will you motivate your readership to action in your conclusion? put names of organizations that are against abortion that they can help out with.

6. How will your editorial serve a public purpose? It will help people relize that abortion is wrong and help the fight against it.

Thursday, March 12, 2009

peer edit 1

Peer Editing Feedback
Jordan

1. What are some areas that could use more detail? Why? the lead, put yourself in it, what does your story have to do with you?

2. What additional sources might the author use? Does the lead involve you in the story? the lead doesn't include you, say something about activities that you are involved in.

3. Do the first 450 words contain a well defined scene (a detailed description of someone doing something or something happening)? What is it? If not, make a suggestion for a scene that might work. Put a scene into your story, it's pretty factual.

4. What questions would you like answered in the next 300 words? What would you like to see or hear more of? Less of? Include, any other suggestions you have for improvement. i like your story overall, it's super well written the only suggestion i have is to put yourself into the story. other than that it's very good!